NaHaiWriMo #27 – write a bad haiku

The thin moon rises
‘tween Venus and Jupiter
and puts on a show

This 5-7-5 haiku tells too much. It is too descriptive and forces the use of a poor choice of words just to get the syllable count. Also no poetics or space for the reader to use his/her own imagination.

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