Distilling Loneliness – A Pantoum

I find it interesting and even a bit disconcerting, in a way (for I fancy myself a bit of a rebel spirit), that I often enjoy the exercise and discipline of following a structured form in writing poetry. I began writing poems by composing haiku – where brevity meets beauty. Now I challenge myself more by writing pantoums and villanelles.

Structure. The pantoum is a form of poetry similar to a villanelle in that there are repeating lines throughout the poem. It is composed of a series of quatrains; the second and fourth lines of each stanza are repeated as the first and third lines of the next.

It’s fun to try to follow the structure outlined and still express the spirit of the words.

Distilling Loneliness

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Following the loving
In the long of day
The distance of blue
Beyond the sweep of sky.

In the long of day
My fingers roam on their own
Beyond the sweep of sky
And your eyes hunger for more.

My fingers roam on their own
While touching releases a sigh
And your eyes hunger for more
Summer squalls rumble by.

While touching releases a sigh
Following the loving
Summer squalls rumble by
In the distance of blue.

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2 thoughts on “Distilling Loneliness – A Pantoum

  1. Thank you for giving us such a fine example of this challenging form. ‘Do wish I had your sense of adventure.

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